If you're wanting this to be a better piece of writing... take a break and rework the beginning.
I'm going to have to re-read it later when I have time to give it proper attention.
I'm going to toss my conclusions at you and if they're helpful to you slapping silly people, please do.
Sex is biological. Gender is behavior. And millions of years of Natural Evolution (aka Science) back up the Bible/Sola Scriptura people on this issue.
Within each species of mammals, in a normal distribution, there are 2 sexes and 2 genders.
Any fringe oddities at the extremes; they MAYBE useful if environmental conditions drastically change; but under normal conditions Nature doesn't care what happens to them.
Anyone "voluntarily" placing themselves at the extremes beyond the 2 pairs of natural states (male/female) and (masculine/feminine); either have mental/emotional issues OR are simply seeking attention.
Anyone at the extremes because that's what Nature gave them, sorry, but that doesn't justify obliterating thousands of years of human culture & natural behaviors just so the very few can "feel" like they belong and are accepted. Nature doesn't care.
People who don't cleave 100% to sex stereotypes are declaring themselves 'gender non-binary' (or the opposite sex) and denying their sex. That, I think, it the problem. I couldn't care less how masculine or feminine a person is, if you're genetically male/female, that's what you are.
What about the beginning didn't work for you? Happy to hear your impressions.
"If you're wanting this to be a better piece of writing..." Perhaps a good response might be "Honestly, I can’t conceive of a worse way to start a conversation with me, an INTP." Maybe Sean has a relationship with Angela that grants him the privilege of offering this kind of critique; in that case it's obviously within the purview of a voluntary contract. Otherwise, it's arrogant, pretentious, and actually just wrong.
I did roll my eyes at his orders. So condescending. If Sean found the beginning confusing as a reader, he should just say so and give specifics. That would be useful.
If you're wanting this to be a better piece of writing... take a break and rework the beginning.
I'm going to have to re-read it later when I have time to give it proper attention.
I'm going to toss my conclusions at you and if they're helpful to you slapping silly people, please do.
Sex is biological. Gender is behavior. And millions of years of Natural Evolution (aka Science) back up the Bible/Sola Scriptura people on this issue.
Within each species of mammals, in a normal distribution, there are 2 sexes and 2 genders.
Any fringe oddities at the extremes; they MAYBE useful if environmental conditions drastically change; but under normal conditions Nature doesn't care what happens to them.
Anyone "voluntarily" placing themselves at the extremes beyond the 2 pairs of natural states (male/female) and (masculine/feminine); either have mental/emotional issues OR are simply seeking attention.
Anyone at the extremes because that's what Nature gave them, sorry, but that doesn't justify obliterating thousands of years of human culture & natural behaviors just so the very few can "feel" like they belong and are accepted. Nature doesn't care.
People who don't cleave 100% to sex stereotypes are declaring themselves 'gender non-binary' (or the opposite sex) and denying their sex. That, I think, it the problem. I couldn't care less how masculine or feminine a person is, if you're genetically male/female, that's what you are.
What about the beginning didn't work for you? Happy to hear your impressions.
"If you're wanting this to be a better piece of writing..." Perhaps a good response might be "Honestly, I can’t conceive of a worse way to start a conversation with me, an INTP." Maybe Sean has a relationship with Angela that grants him the privilege of offering this kind of critique; in that case it's obviously within the purview of a voluntary contract. Otherwise, it's arrogant, pretentious, and actually just wrong.
I did roll my eyes at his orders. So condescending. If Sean found the beginning confusing as a reader, he should just say so and give specifics. That would be useful.
Couldn't agree more, 😊